Final Touch is looking for a sister site! It must be a review site of some sort. Thank you!

9/14/13

Requests are open.
I haven't really been getting many visitors here lately. I haven't gotten any requests in a month when at one point, I was getting tons! I'll be around even if there aren't any recent updates.

Info

Reviews are cleared at the end of each month.
Site Restarted: 1/12/13
Site Started: 6/1/10

Welcome


Final Touch is on an indefinite hiatus. I'll probably come back at some point, but who knows when.

Welcome! I see you've found Final Touch! I'm Wendy, your guide to grammar and spelling.

Final Touch is a proofreading site. I will not review your site much, only check its grammar and spelling and offer you every specific example I see. Many sites have typos or mistakes in them. I noticed this, along with the fact that no other review sites specialize in proofreading and often only offer generalizations about grammar problems.

I'm sure you've already noticed the navigation bar on the left.

Feel free to contact me with any questions, suggestions, or anything else you'd like to neomail me about.






Rules

It is required that you read these rules before requesting. Note: Some of the rules were edited or rewritten by Jenny at La Casa.



Types

You've got a few choices.



Traditional Proofread

In a Traditional proofread, I will proofread the entire site and list any and all specific errors that I find.

This does not include a full link check, but I will always mention it if I notice any bad links within the site.

Rubric

Site Name
Name or Username

Score: ???/50

Problems

I put any definite problems that must be fixed here.
Ex.: Under Pick-up, there should be a comma after "currently".

Comments

I put any comments that are not necessary to change here. I will not take off points for them.
Ex.: The only thing under the Extras part is the Portfolio, so unless you're going to put more there, you might as well just link straight to the portfolio.

Suggestions

This section is not always applicable.
I will never take off points for suggestions.
Ex.: You might want to put the results for each person on a separate anchored page.

Overall

Here I will put my general thoughts about your site.
Ex.: Site Name Here is a nice, well-organized site. It had quite a few typos or errors, but only one really interfered with its making sense. Good luck!



Section Proofread

In a Section proofread, I will proofread a section of your site. I will do this if you add a section or content to your site, even if I already proofread your full site.

A Section proofread is a faster version of a Traditional proofread.

This does not include a link check.

Rubric

Site Name
Name or Username

Score: ???/25

Problems


I put any definite problems that must be fixed here.
Ex.: Under Pick-up, there should be a comma after "currently".

Comments


I put any comments that are not necessary to change here. I will not take off points for them.
Ex.: The only thing under the Extras part is the Portfolio, so unless you're going to put more there, you might as well just link straight to the portfolio.

Suggestions


This section is not always applicable.
I will never take off points for suggestions.
Ex.: You might want to put the results for each person on a separate anchored page.

Overall


Here I will put my general thoughts about the section of your site.
Ex.: Site Name Here is a nice, well-organized site. It had quite a few typos or errors, but only one really interfered with its making sense. Good luck!



Link Sweep

In a Link Sweep, I will make sure that any links go to the right place. Speed depends on how many links you have.

This will not receive a score.

Rubric

Site Name
Name or Username


Incorrect Links:


I will tell you about any links that lead to a closed, deleted, or moved page here.

Overall:


Here I will put my general thoughts about your site and its links.



New Site

A New Site review is similar to what you'd find at most review sites, but less harsh and in-depth. In a New Site review, I will give general comments on how to improve. I will proofread you completely, rewrite content if need be, and help with content. This is best if it's your first site and you're not 100% sure what you're doing.

This will not receive a score.

Rubric

Site Name
Name or Username

Proofread

Here I will proofread the site.

Content

Here I will discuss the content of the site.

Overall

Here I will put my general thoughts about your site.



Add-ons

Unscored

I'll do any of the other reviews, but I won't give you a score.
You don't have to specify this for Link Sweeps.

Private

This works with any of the above reviews, but I'll neomail you the results instead of posting them. I will only send them once, and it may take several neomails due to the character limit.
You will still be posted on the waiting list.



Request

Form



Use the following form.


Waiting List

  1. Name at Site Name (Rubric)
  2. Name at Site Name (Rubric)
  3. Name at Site Name (Rubric)




Results

Warning: I speak American English, and I am just learning about British grammar as I operate this site. I apologize if I accidentally take points off for something written correctly. Please ask me if you think that what you wrote was correct and I wrote that it was wrong.

Click on your button to see the results. The most recent reviews are first.



Note: Review style (on recent reviews) of writing:
You wrote:
It should be:
Why
is from How to Write Great Reviews and was suggested at La Casa.


Site Name

by Name

Score: ???/50

Problems

Comments

Suggestions

Overall



Site Name

by Name

Proofread

Content

Overall



Emblem

by Annie

Proofread

Problems

The arrow that goes back to Dimensional does not work.

Comments

I don't know if you just temporarily switched the pages on Somulyi's and Ahakor's petpages, but the link back buttons are messed up.

Content

Well, your customizations look great, but the organization seemed a little odd in places.
I noticed that the NP only customizations include the Bargain-priced customizations. After looking at the Bargain-priced choices, I looked at the NP only choices expecting to see more customizations, rather than mostly the same ones repeated. I think that a better way would be to have only the ones over 50k listed there and to have a link to the Bargain-priced customizations in the info section.

Overall

Emblem looked great! I'm not the most critical reviewer, but I had almost nothing to say or suggest. Great job with the site!


Cocopalm's Adoption Agency

by Bloo

Score: 44/50

Problems

You wrote: Orudia the Biscuit Peophin
It should be: Orudia the Biscuit Aisha
-1 point

You wrote: Rorind the Plushie Poogle
Why: Rorind is the wrong size text.
-1 point

You wrote: pagarito99 the Desert Usul
It should be: pagarito99 the Jelly Acara
Why:
-1 point

You wrote: ScarlettSapphire_3 the Robot Wocky
Why: ScarlettSapphire_3 is the wrong size text.
-0 points (similar mistake above)

You wrote: Our Guild members also contribute their lab rays to the agency, by zapping unfortunate pets and gifting them to deserving Neopians.
It should be: Our guild members also contribute their lab rays to the agency, by zapping unfortunate pets and gifting them to deserving Neopians.
Why: Guild is not a proper noun and there is no reason for it to be capitalized. You could say "Members of our guild, Guild Name Here, also contribute…" if you wanted as well.
-1 point

You wrote: I might not have got the first mail at all.
It should be: I might not have gotten the first mail at all.
-1 point

You wrote: Dreamies List: By froggeh
This doesn't link anywhere.
-1 point

Comments

Make sure you update regularly! You should check the pets as I did to make sure they have not been adopted or zapped.
Also, some of the pets under zappers (though I don't really understand what that section is and why guild members can't just list their UFA pets with the rest) have deadlines that have passed already.

Suggestions

None.

Overall

Cocopalm's Adoption Agency looks great and has few typos but needs to be maintained more. Good luck!


Celestial

by Delightful

Proofread

You wrote: You can request up to two buttons per a week, and multiple button requests may be on one form.
It should be: You can request up to two buttons per week, and multiple button requests may be on one form.
Why: The "a" between per and week isn't necessary.

You wrote: Provide me with as much details as possible.
It should be: Provide me with as many details as possible.
Why: Much is used for things that cannot be counted; many is used when things can be counted: much information, many details.

You wrote: This type of request lets you choose everything for your button, the border, animation, font, and image!
It should be: This type of request lets you choose everything for your button: the border, animation, font, and image!
Why: The button is not part of the list, but the list describes the button.

You wrote under FAQ: Send it in here.
The link doesn't go to your neomail as it should.

You wrote: Achievements, awards, reviews, and rankings I have received.
It should be: Achievements, awards, and rankings I have received.
Why: I deleted "reviews" since you link back to reviews in the Sitely. Also, received was misspelled.

You wrote: If you are not satisfied with your layout I will redo it for you.
It should be: If you are not satisfied with your layout, I will redo it for you.
Why: You need a comma.

Content

You wrote: When providing me with an image, put a # in the URL.
I have no clue what that means. Is that to break up the URL so the neomail still goes through?

Under Fully Custom Requests, one of the categories is Animation. Since not all of the options are animated, I suggest changing it to Effects.

Overall

Celestial looks great! Your buttons are of high quality and you have very few typos. Good luck!


Wild Rose Graphics

by Stefanie-Ann

Proofread

In the first introductory paragraph, you capitalized many words that do not need to be capitalized: Graphics (not in Wild Rose Graphics), Glitters, Shops, Guild, and Sites.

You wrote: If you would like to link these Graphics to your Guild or site you may, but please have something linking back to my site.
It should be: If you would like to link these graphics to your guild or site, you may, but please have something linking back to my site.
Why: Graphics and guild are not proper nouns, so they don't have to be capitalized. (also in next rules)
Since "If you… guild or site" is a dependent clause depending on "you may", you need a comma just before "you may".

You wrote: If you are using the premade banners or glitters please keep the link to this site connected.
It should be: If you are using the premade banners or glitters, please keep the link to this site connected.
Why: When the dependent clause comes first, you must put a comma between the two clauses.

You wrote: Again I work really hard on making Graphics for you guys without having my name on them and asking for nothing in return, I would like you to respect that I made these for you to use.
It should be: Again, I work really hard on making Graphics for you guys without having my name on them and asking for nothing in return; I would like you to respect that I made these for you to use.
Why: There should be a comma after again and the "I would like you…" is a separate sentence, so I replaced the comma with a semicolon.

You wrote on the Banner Request for: Neopets User Name
It should be: Neopets Username
Why: Username is one word and that's how you write it the other times.

Content

In the introductory paragraph, you should mention your name and link to your userlookup so people can learn about you and know where to contact you.

Since you have space for more affiliates, you should link to your userlookup or a blank neomail so people can easily contact you. I was looking at the quality of your link back buttons and first, you should have more than 3. You could make more or maybe do a swap with another button maker.
The first button is pretty good, but the animation is too fast. It's easy to read and the image is fairly clear, but the animation almost covers it since it's so fast.
The second button is glittered and the image looks cool, but the text is hard to read and unclear.
The text in the third button is good, but the image is not. The quality is not great and it looks a bit squished (though I'm not certain about that).
Also, you should make your own button borders, even if they are based off ones you have seen.

When you have a lot of very small text, I suggest the font 04b03. A very detailed guide to button making can be found here.

Under Glitters, there is no point to have a link to Next Glitter1 that goes to a blank page. You should delete that until you have content.
Again, there is no point in having links to blank pages on the Extras page either.

I found the codes under each glitter a bit confusing. I think it would be better to have 4-5 glitters per line (keeping it constant), then have the text areas directly underneath at the same width as the image, with a few blank lines before the next row.
Also, each glitter should be the same size so that works: the Faerie Acara shouldn't be larger than the others, and the Mutant Acara looks cut off.

Overall

Wild Rose Graphics looks like a pretty good site! The button and banner image quality could be better, but your grammar and spelling were great. Keep practicing and good luck!


Creamied

by Julia

Score: 92/100

Problems

You wrote: There is also a Kiriban event, the person who is the lucky visitor will get the the chance to order an ice cream and a customized side, even though requests are closed.
It should be: There is also a Kiriban event, the person who is the lucky visitor will get the the chance to order an ice cream and a customized side, even if requests are closed.
Why: Requests may or may not be closed at that time, and the person would be able to request regardless.
-1 point

You wrote: You can also contact me at Vanillarise in deviantart
It should be: You can also contact me at Vanillarise in deviantart.
Why: There should be a period at the end of the sentence.
-1 point

You wrote: Have tons of new suggestions in ice creams/sides?
It should be: Have tons of new suggestions for ice creams/sides?
Why: It was fine as you had it, but I think that "for" sounds more natural.
-0 points

You wrote: You're free to colour these linearts, post them anywhere, but please do not redistribute it.
It should be: You're free to colour these linearts, post them anywhere, but please do not redistribute them.
Why: You're talking about multiple linearts, so you have to use the plural.
-1 point

You wrote: Do not redistribute the ice creams or claim it as your own.
It should be: Do not redistribute the ice creams or claim them as your own. Why: You're talking about multiple ice creams, so you have to use the plural.
-0 points (already took off for a similar mistake)

You wrote: Do not alter or edit the image in any way, if you would like to recolour or edit it please contact me first.
It should be: Do not alter or edit the image in any way; if you would like to recolour or edit it, please contact me first.
Why: Complete should be separated by semicolons rather than commas. Also, since the second sentence needed a comma.
-1 point

You wrote: Ice Creams with the Text Banner allows you to add in your own text!
It should be: Ice Creams with the Text Banner allow you to add in your own text!
Why: "Allow" refers to Ice Creams, which is plural.
-1 point

You wrote: Expect to wait up to 7 days for each ice cream you ordered
It should be: Expect to wait up to 7 days for each ice cream you ordered.
Why: The sentence needs a period at the end.
The sixth rule in this section also has the same problem.
-0 points (already took off for a similar mistake)

You wrote: Please only order one ice cream at a time, if I've finished yours and requests are still open, feel free to request one again!
It should be: Please only order one ice cream at a time. If I've finished yours and requests are still open, feel free to request one again!
Why: The sentences cannot be separated by only a comma.
-1 point

You wrote: Mega Cone ice creams does NOT come with faces, while Mini Cones do.
It should be: Mega Cone ice creams do NOT come with faces, while Mini Cones do.
Why: Ice creams is plural, so the verb must be too.
-1 points

You wrote: If you can't find your ice cream here, please check the Portfolio
It should be: If you can't find your ice cream here, please check the Portfolio.
Why: The sentence needs a period at the end.
-0 points (already took off for a similar mistake)

You wrote: In the Portfolio you can find all of the ice creams I've made throughout since Creamied is open!
It should be: In the Portfolio you can find all of the ice creams I've made throughout since Creamied opened OR has been open!
Why: It opened in the past, and open is present tense. You should use either the past or present perfect, I believe that is.
-1 point

You wrote: Feel free to send in as many suggestion as you'd like!
It should be: Feel free to send in as many suggestions as you'd like!
Why: Suggestions should be plural, since you can send it many.
-0 points (already took off for a similar mistake)

You wrote: Any type of sites are welcomed!
It should be: Any type of sites is welcomed!
Why: "Is" refers to "type" so it should use the singular form.
-0 points (already took off for a similar mistake)

Comments

The Kiriban contest hasn't been updated for July.

If you prefer, you can link neomail envelopes straight to the neomail:
/neomessages.phtml?type=send&recipient=missviper&subject=Creamied+Suggestions

The bottom of the credits are covered by the Polarchuck- try putting them on the left side or putting extra spaces (br) underneath it.

Suggestions

None.

Overall

Creamied looks like a great site! You repeated a lot of typos several times and had quite a few minor grammar issues, but everything was easily understandable. Good luck!


Eurel

by Julia

Proofread

You wrote: We've started constructing on 29th May 2013, and has officially established on 14th June 2013!
It should be: We started constructing on 29th May 2013, and became officially established on 14th June 2013! Why: The tenses didn't really make sense.

You wrote: To let you have an easier time finding the sites you're looking for, we've broke them up into a total of 16 categories, and also 2 to 3 sub-categories
It should be: To let you have an easier time finding the sites you're looking for, we've broken them up into a total of 16 categories, and also 2 to 3 sub-categories.
Why: If you're using present perfect, it's "broken", not "broke", and every sentence should end in a period. Whether you need the period after the emoticon is debatable, though.
However, while I'm on this topic, I'll also mention that you did this several times with the emoticons. Also, it's generally good to use less emoticons in this section of your site, especially if you want people to take you very seriously.

You wrote: Editings by Julia (missviper)
It should be: Edits by Julia (missviper)
Why: They're called edits. Also, if you'd like, you don't have to write out your username since you link to your lookup.

Content

I have no comments pertaining to the content. You seem to be doing a great job listing sites!

For the Berry Code for the Dream in Pink, I suggest you save the berry image on your computer and re-upload it, since right now it's very simple to copy the image url and search for it in the source code.

Overall

Eurel looks great! There were very few typos or problems with the site. Good luck!


Wirch

New Site

by Edith

Proofread

You wrote: Please don't edit the banners except those in "Blank Bases
It should be: Please don't edit the banners except those in Blank Bases".
Why: There should be a period at the end of the sentence.

You wrote: Right click on the banner and click [Copy image URL]/[Properties] & copy the URL.
It should be: Right click on the banner and click [Copy image URL] [i]or[/i] [Copy Image Address] [i]or[/i] [Properties] and then copy the URL.
Why: You don't have to change that, but I tried to make it clearer.

You wrote under the Icons navigation: Ataldor
It should be: Altador
Why: It was misspelled.

You wrote: If you have found to be failed at reading the rules, I will mail you with reason and you can resend your form if requests are still open. If you failed to read the rules again, you won't be allowed to request again within the whole week.
It should be: If you are found to have failed at reading the rules, I will mail you with the reason and you can resend your form if requests are still open. If you fail to read the rules again, you won't be allowed to request again within the whole week.
Why: The verb tenses were kind of strange.

You wrote: Feel free to mail me redo requests, I will be very pleased if I receive your comments.
It should be: Feel free to mail me redo requests; I will be very pleased if I receive your comments.
Why: Since they are each a complete sentence, you should separate them with a semicolon rather than a comma.

You wrote: As long as your site isn't a Banners/Icons requests site.
It should be: The only exception is if you have a banners/icons request site.
Why: That wasn't a complete sentence. Also, related to the content, I suggest you also include premade banners/icons site, since they can also clearly make their own. You wrote: Banner Reqeust and Icon Reqeust on the signs that link to the requesting info.
It should be: Banner Request and Icon Request
Why: Request was misspelled.

You wrote: The image you chose must be bigger or equal to your banner size to obtain a high-quality banner
It should be: The image you choose must be bigger or equal to your banner size to obtain a high-quality banner
Why: Choose should not be in the past tense, as the person may not have chosen it yet.

You wrote: This request form is suitable for people who knows clearly what they need & what they want.
It should be: This request form is suitable for people who know clearly what they need and what they want.
Why: Since people is plural, you use know. And it's generally a good idea to write "and" and similar words out.

Under the Icon Request Forms, you said "banner" a few times.

You wrote: Banners/Icons will be placed here within 1-2 weeks.
It should be: Banners/Icons will be placed here for 1-2 weeks.
Why: If you aren't already, you should always neomail people when a request is finished. And the banner/icon should be placed there immediately and stay for 1-2 weeks.

You wrote under Extras: Acheivements
It should be: Achievements
Why: It was misspelled.

You wrote in the title on the Survey page: Surevey
It should be: Survey
Why: It was misspelled.

You wrote: Reiewed by...
It should be: Reviewed by…
Why: It was misspelled.

Content

I suggest that you change your bold and possibly italics to a darker color because they can be kind of hard to read.

Where you explain how to use the image code for the banners, does it let you put IMAGEURL instead of an actual link since it's in a text area? If it does, it's a bit clearer that way.

Where you link to the subsections of banners, icons, and signs, it would look better if you put a space on both sides of the | .

I don't understand the difference between banners and signs. The only difference I can see is that banners have images, while signs don't. But people who are using your site will probably be more interested in the appearance than whether there is an image. I suggest that you either combine them or move the categories they have in common to Signs. I suggest getting a second opinion on how to organize this, perhaps in a Q and A review.

On the Edith's Pick banner form, you do in fact ask for a background image, despite what you said earlier.
Also, on the custom banner form, you might want to say that spaces can be left blank, but you don't have to do that.

On your survey, it looks like it was copied almost exactly from A Button Collection. In fact, some of the questions still say "button" in them! You should at least fix that and possibly even change many of the questions, since you are doing it for only Wirch, which does not offer buttons. The survey at ABC was made for button sites in general and not specifically her site, Open Eyes, and many of the questions are not suitable for Wirch. I suggest that you write a new survey for Wirch alone. A few tips I have would be to make it much shorter and only apply to Wirch. I'd be happy to help you with that if you need it!

The navigation on the side: The light color makes some of them a bit hard to read. Also, it can be hard to read some of them because of the way the text overlaps.

Overall

Wirch had a lot of typos and errors that did not make sense. In the future, I suggest using spell check to find obvious spelling errors. It sometimes appeared that you copied and pasted sections without checking that they were changed to accommodate the other location. Wirch has a lot of potential! Keep it up!


Tsunami

Complete Unscored

by Alice

Problems

You wrote: Welcome to Tsunami, a adoptable site by Alice!
It should be: Welcome to Tsunami, an adoptables site by Alice!
Why: Since "adoptables" starts with a vowel, you should use "an" before it. Also, I'm assuming that you offer multiple adoptables and that the site cannot be adopted. :)

You wrote: Please do not enter the adoptables into beauty contest entries, art spotlight entries or pet spotlight entries
It should be: Please do not enter the adoptables into beauty contest entries, art spotlight entries or pet spotlight entries.
Why: There was no period at the end of the sentence.

Comments

Rule 5 is missing the space between the period and the rule.

The Sitely looks rather odd where you give the link back buttons because sometimes you put one on a line, sometimes there are two on a line. Either way works, but you should be consistent.

Suggestions

None.

Overall

Tsunami has very few errors. Great job!


Find your home

Complete

by Mia

Score: 93/100

Problems

You wrote: Over the last year that FYH has been active we have re-homed around 300 pets and I have not received 1 complaint about a trade/adoption going wrong.
It should be: Over the last year that FYH has been active we have re-homed around 300 pets and I have not received one complaint about a trade/adoption going wrong.
Why: I did a little research, and small numbers are written out while large numbers can be typed as "300". If you think that looks awkward now, you could also say that you have not received "a single" complaint.
-0.5 points

You wrote: thanks for visiting my site, make sure you check out the terms of use before applying for a pet & check out the team page (important information)
It should be: Thanks for visiting my site! Make sure you check out the terms of use before applying for a pet. Also, please check out the team page (important information).
Why: The first word of a sentence should be capitalized.
You should only make compound sentences if the clauses are related. Therefore, that should be three separate sentences.
Last, I don't understand what important information is on the team page. I looked, and I do not understand why it is so important to know who is helping with the site before you apply for a pet.
-2 points

You wrote: scroll down for UFA pets
It should be: Scroll down for UFA pets.
Why: Complete sentences are always nice. I suppose it looks alright as it is, but it technically should be fixed.
-1 point

You wrote: this page usually takes a few minutes to load fully
It should be: This page usually takes a few minutes to load fully.
Why: Complete sentences are always nice. I suppose it looks alright as it is, but it technically should be fixed.
-1 points

You wrote: Free transfers. We forbid using the pound
It should be: Free transfers are required. We forbid using the pound.
Why: You need to use complete sentences.
-1 point
However, I did not understand this rule at all the first time I read it. I suggest rewriting it as:
You must have free pet transfers available this month. We forbid transferring pets through the main pound.

You wrote: Fill in the following form and send it to me here
Everyone makes mistakes
Are we allowed to paint/morph pets once we adopt/trade for them
Message me here if you're interested
They should be complete sentences with periods (or questions marks) at the end.
-1 points

Comments

In your credits, most sites like if you say exactly what they made. Such as precisely which button you got at Open Eyes, which was from Floret, which was from Starry Sparkles, etc.

You called the section with credits and buttons and listers and affiliates "Site" but it is generally called "Sitely" to avoid confusion with all of FYH.

Also, the name of your site is Find your home. Names of things are generally all capitalized, like Find Your Home. You could keep it as Find your home as a bit of a style if you preferred, but I thought I'd mention it.

I cannot find where your affiliates, Kassi's Guide to Finding Stuck Pets and HACK, link back to their affiliates, if you are unaware. They may and I can't find it, but I thought I'd mention it.

Suggestions

Where it says "scroll down for UFA pets", you could link it to that point on the page.

Where all of the pets are listed, you could link the the pet lookups like on the guild adoption agency so it's easy to check the color and stats of a pet.

Overall

Find your home had generally good grammar despite having many incomplete sentences. The rest of your grammar was great and your spelling were great!


Asura

by Kayla

Score: 95/100

Problems

You wrote under Get Listed: Comments and Ratings: The site with the highest star rating and most comments are placed there.
It should be: The sites with the highest star rating and most comments are placed there.
Why: I'm assuming there is more than one site there, plus, you use the "are" when referring to "site".
-1 point

You wrote under the FAQ: I will keep your site listed on my watch-list (which I keep in my phone) and be sure to monitor submissions for you site extra closely.
It should be: I will keep your site listed on my watch-list (which I keep in my phone) and be sure to monitor submissions for your site extra closely.
Why: Your needs to be possessive, because you own the site.
-1 point

You wrote: There is no limit to the amount of listings one person can submit.
It should be: There is no limit to the number of listings one person can submit.
Why: It should be number instead of amount because the number of listings can be counted. Random example: amount of snow, number of snowflakes.
-1 point

In the navigation between site types:
The Coding page has Avatar Lending bolded as well.
Customization only has Coding bold.
-1 point

You wrote under Guilds: Select which category you of guild you with to view.
It should be: Select which category you of guild you wish to view.
Why: You typed the wrong word. Also, this happened on every page for guilds.
-1 point

Comments

The like button image on the main page isn't coming up.

The first NR guild that is listed has a different link and button than should be, according to the guild name.

One of your affiliates, Theories, has changed its name.

Suggestions

For the url to neomail you, you could also provide a link. The destination would be:

You can get the link for the other one by opening the link.

Overall

Asura had many typos considering that I only checked your text and not the specific listings. They never actually interfered with understanding what you meant, fortunately. Great job!


Nova

by Elisabeth

Score: 97/100

Problems

You wrote (Welcome): Nova opened in Novemeber 2012 as a way for me to improve my graphics abilities and to make friends.
It should be: Nova opened in November 2012 as a way for me to improve my graphics abilities and to make friends.
Why: November was misspelled.
-1 point

You wrote (Rules): By having these up for you to use, I am making myself venerable to thieves.
It should be: By having these up for you to use, I am making myself vulnerable to thieves.
Why: You're exposing yourself, not making yourself respected by thieves.
-1 point

You wrote (Sitely): Between Lexy and me, you can always find what your looking for.
It should be: Between Lexy and me, you can always find what you're looking for.
Why: Your is possessive. You're is "you are".
-1 point

Comments

One of your affiliates, Mesmeric, (/~jearoy) doesn't seem to be there anymore. I'm not quite sure what's up, but it doesn't look right to me.

Suggestions

Under the requests, I would suggest making the divs slightly wider, because they have scrollbars if you try to expand the text areas at all.

Under pickup, you might want to provide the pickup code in text areas.

Space out your button bases in the resources by adding a margin, I believe. Coding help can be found here.

Overall

Overall, Nova had very few errors. It looked like a nice site with good graphics. I apologize for taking so long to complete your review; it was unprofessional and I shouldn't have been so distracted by other things on the internet.


Plarning's Craft Room

by Sue

Score: 90/100

Problems

You wrote: Hello, and welcome to Plarning's Craft Room, my name is Sue. The craft room is a custom button site. If you happened upon this site by accident click here to go to the neopets home page.
It should be: Hello, and welcome to Plarning's Craft Room. My name is Sue. The craft room is a custom button site. If you happened upon this site by accident, click here to go to the Neopets home page.
Why: The first sentence was a run-on. It needed to be split or have a semicolon. Also, the last sentence needed a comma. I also capitalized Neopets because it is a proper noun: the site's name.
-2 points

You wrote: The only exception is if you want to do a button trade, that is exceptable..
It should be: The only exception is if you want to do a button trade; that is acceptable.
Why: You only need one period at the end of a sentence. And "acceptable" means allowed, but "exceptable" is not a word.
-1 point

You wrote: If it is too vage I won't ask you for more information I will just delete your neomail.
It should be: If it is too vague, I won't ask you for more information; I will just delete your neomail.
Why: Vague was misspelled, and you needed a comma and a semicolon.
-1 points

You wrote: see rule 3 on your site
It should be: Be patient; depending on how many buttons you requested and what you want on them, it may take me a day or two. Also, I do have a life outside of Neopets, so I am not on all day, every day. If I have not neomailed you about your buttons, they are not finished. If you find them on the pick-up section and I haven't neomailed you, you either deleted the neomail or I simply got busy and forgot and I apologize.
Why: Which error?
-2 points

You wrote: You get one request of 3 max per week. I can't spend all my time making things for you sorry.
It should be: You get one request of 3 max per week. I can't spend all my time making things for you; sorry.
Why: I added the semicolon because it was a run-on sentence.
0.5 points

You wrote: I have more requests to put up and I can't have a page 400 miles long again sorry.
It should be: I have more requests to put up, and I can't have a page 400 miles long again; sorry.
Why: I added the comma and semicolon so it wasn't a run-on sentence.
-1 point

You wrote: Advertising my work as your own will result in you being reported I will not bother to try and reason with you.
It should be: Advertising my work as your own will result in you being reported. I will not bother to try and reason with you.
Why: I added a period because it was a run-on sentence.
-1 points

You wrote: Remember:
1. to insert the link you want to use replace Ubiquitinization with the pet name where your site is located and;
2. Please leave credit somewhere
It should be: Remember:
1. Insert the link you want to use replace Ubiquitinization with the pet name where your site is located.
2. Please leave credit somewhere.
Why: The way you had it didn't make sense, because it was a list. Each entry should be a separate sentence.

Under the FAQ, there's an extra "Q".
-1 point

Comments

The requesting section has a lot of problems. I don't really know where to begin by just proofreading it, but I can add the Content from New Site review to this, if you'd like me to help you revamp it.

Suggestions

See Comments section.

You can find some button tutorials here and here, to start.

Overall

Well, Plarning's Craft Room has a lot of potential, but also a lot of problems. If you get past them, I can see Plarning's being a pretty good site.


Beneath the Lights

by Anna

Score: 95/100

Problems

On the What is Customizing? page, the link to find where to buy NC should go to here.

-0.5 points

On the How do I go about creating an outfit? page, you have 2 links to pages on your site that don't exist. The text is "have limits" and "finding matching wearables".
-0.5 points

You wrote: If you're like me, over time you'll also amass a great deal of wearables in your closet, that will give you a much freerer range.
It should be: If you're like me, over time you'll also amass a great deal of wearables in your closet that will give you a much freer range.
Why: I removed a comma between closet and that because it was not necessary. Freer was misspelled.
-1 point

You wrote: Be original, don't be afraid to take risks or experiment with new colours or themes.
It should be: Be original; don't be afraid to take risks or experiment with new colours or themes.
Why: You can't have two complete sentences separated by only a comma; they must have a semicolon. The same problem is in the next sentence.
-1 point

The links to Jellyneo don't work. You could link to the list of fan sites, though. You might want to do a search for the text Jellyneo to fix all of the links.

You wrote: To seperate paint brush clothing from standard wearables, make sure the item has a name of a PB clothing colour in it, for example 'Christmas Kacheek Hat' and 'Disco Kacheek Glasses' are paint brush clothing, 'Kacheek Pyjama Gown' is not.
It should be: To separate paint brush clothing from standard wearables, make sure the item has a name of a PB clothing colour in it. For example 'Christmas Kacheek Hat' and 'Disco Kacheek Glasses' are paint brush clothing, while Kacheek Pyjama Gown' is not.
Why: First, separate was misspelled. Then, I think you should make that two sentences because it was very long. Last, you need a conjunction dividing that last phrase.
-1.5 point

You wrote under Requests: If you ever loose your request, feel free to mail me as I will have it saved somewhere.
It should be: If you ever lose your request, feel free to mail me as I will have it saved somewhere.
Why: You wrote loose instead of lose.
-0.5 points

Comments

On the Cross painting page, only the first word in the titles is capitalized.

Under alternative painting
Under Acara, it says "Green~Speckled, which is backwards.

Overall

Overall, you had very few typos, particularly considering how much text there was. I did my best to correct this according to the British grammar, but I only know American closely. Good job!


Petticoat

by Fish

Score: 96/100

Problems

Under General Rubrics- Classic, you wrote: This section will focus mainly on the very first things that I notice when I first skim through your application, both the good and the bad.
You might mean: This section will focus mainly on the very first things that I notice when I first skim through your site, both the good and the bad.
Why: This rubric is intended to be for all sites, but that said application.
-1 point

Under General Rubric-Visual-aesthetic appeal, you wrote: Are your graphics and resources of a high quality? Does it capture the attention of your visitors?
You need to specify what it is. If you mean graphics and resources, it should be "they" rather than "it".
-1 point

Under Specific rubrics-request site, you wrote: Customers who own request sites (eg reviews, graphics, layouts, stories etc) and would like a specialized review which focuses on the level of service and quality of content that their site offers.
E.g." should have a period after each letter.
-0.5 points

You wrote: Points will not be deducted for isolated errors; however, consistent improper grammar will be penalized.
It should be: Points will not be deducted for isolated errors; however, consistently improper grammar will be penalized.
Why: The "consistent" is describing an adjective, "improper", so it must be an adverb.
-0.5 points

You wrote under Specialty rubrics-Custom: This section will focus mainly on the very first things that I notice when I first skim through your application, both the good and the bad.
It should be: This section will focus mainly on the very first things that I notice when I first skim through your site, both the good and the bad.
Why: You review all sites now, not just pet apps.

You wrote: For more established sites may opt for a more critical approach while newer sites can opt for more leniency.
It should be: More established sites may opt for a more critical approach while newer sites can opt for more leniency.
Why: It needed another noun because there was an extra preposition.
-1 point

Comments

Under Specific rubrics-Request site, you wrote: She is thus the perfect source of critique for one's level of service for unprofessionalism withers within a 10 mile radius around her.
I'm not sure if you meant: She is thus the perfect source of critique for one's level of service or unprofessionalism withers within a 10 mile radius around her.

You wrote under Specialty Rubrics-Custom: your name and link to your user look up
On neopets, it's generally user lookup, I think. There's the same thing for the Pet App Rubrics-Classic. You find want to use the find too because it's repeated a few times.

Link Check

I checked all of the links on the Useful Links page. The following are gone: Sparkle (/~Sparkle), VLA (or ULA?) (/~peacilsa), Encee's Style Guide (/~Normal), Iridescent (/~Boib_).
Under neopet-related adoptables, Sari's Arts and Coco's Customs have moved.

Overall

Overall, your site had very few typos and errors, especially considering the large amount of text. Great job! I didn't take off points for the links, because I wouldn't expect you to constantly check them all and that wasn't part of the rubric. Petticoat seemed to me like a great site.


Century

by Paulina

Score: 94/100

Problems

You wrote: If you are looking for Lunar CSS, the content is still here, only the layout and site name has been changed.
It should be: If you are looking for Lunar CSS, the content is still here, only the layout and site name have been changed.
Why: You're referring to both the layout and the site name, so the verb should be for a plural noun.
-1 point

You wrote: Hello, welcome to Century, where we currently offer icons, and button bases.
It should be: Hello, and welcome to Century where we currently offer icons and button bases.
Why: I'm not sure if you need the word "and" at first, though you might. I'm also not sure if you need a comma before "where". You definitely do not need a comma after "icons", though, because there are only two things in the list.
-0.5 points

Both of the boards that you link to no longer exist.
-0.5 points

The button for the link to Top Dog no longer exists.
-0.5 points

Under buttons, two of the bases and one of the borders are gone.
-1 point

On the requests page, you should put a period at the end of the sentences.
-1 point

On the requests page, the header on the sitely page shows through.
-0.5 points

On the sitely page, the affiliate's link back button has changed.
-0.5 points

Comments

I noticed that all of your borders are straight from Impulse's Tutorial, and you don't even link back. I was kind of disappointed that you didn't have your own content for that. You could at least delete the gray middle from the borders, so you have done something and they are easier to use. A guide to making borders can be found here, if you're interested. As I'm not reviewing content, I can't take off points, but I did want to say that anyway.

Suggestions

See Comments.

Overall

Overall, Century didn't have many typos. Then again, it didn't have much text. The fact that you have broken images shows that you don't really pay that much attention to your site and don't look at it very often. Anyway, good job!


Candy Apples

by Bubyay

Score: 85/100

Problems

You wrote: This page is going to be temporarily closed but I will finish request I have already received.
It should be: This page is going to be temporarily closed but I will finish requests I have already received.
or This page is going to be temporarily closed but I will finish the request I have already received.
Why: I'm assuming you got more than one request? And if not, it needs to change to have an article anyway.
-1 point

You wrote: Just to let you all know that I am have a minor problem with getting links to attach to images right now but I am having TNT check that out for me but for now I have the images up with the a message next to them saying "click here to go to the site" so the people can still go to the sites.
It should be: Just to let you all know, I am having a minor problem with getting links to attach to images right now, but I am having TNT check that out for me. For now I have the images up with the a message next to them saying "click here to go to the site" so the people can still go to the sites.
Why: That sentence was way, way too long. I deleted the "that" and replaced it with a comma so your first clause now has a verb, rather than just a verb in the subjunctive form. Then, I added the comma because it was a run-on sentence. I separated the last clause because three independent clauses in one sentence is just getting too long.
-2 points

You wrote: If you are looking for the rules you have found the right place.
It should be: If you are looking for the rules, you have found the right place.
Why: When connecting a dependent clause with an independent clause, you need a comma. Like that sentence I just wrote.
-2 points (for all of this repeated error)

You wrote: If you unsure that your credit is good enough then send me a neomail message and I can let you know if it is or not.
It should be: If you unsure that your credit is good enough, then send me a neomail message and I can let you know if it is or not. Why: See previous explanation.

You wrote: If you are unhappy with your apple then please let me know and I will fix it.
It should be: If you are unhappy with your apple, please let me know and I will fix it.
Why: See previous explanation.

You wrote: So when your order is filled you can then request another as long as requests are still open.
It should be: So when your order is filled, you can then request another as long as requests are still open.
Why: See previous explanation.

You wrote: No form then no apple sorry.
It should be: If you don't submit a form, you will not receive an apple. Sorry.
Why: I don't even know where to begin. That was nowhere near a complete sentence.
-1 point

You wrote: If you want exact colors please show me an image or give me the hex codes.
It should be: If you want exact colors, please show me an image or give me the hex codes.
Why: When connecting a dependent clause with an independent clause, you need a comma. Like that sentence I just wrote.

You wrote: Also please include the word "cream" in your request form so I know you read the reules thatnks.
It should be: Also please include the word "cream" in your request form so I know you read the rules. Thanks. Why: Misspellings, run-on sentence.
-1 point

You wrote: Please don't forget I do have a life just like you so thanks for understanding.
It should be: Please don't forget, I do have a life just like you; thanks for understanding.
Why: Please, no more run-on sentences…
-1 point

You wrote: Well ok then next you can head over to the pickup page to pick out a premade apple or get an idea from other's apples.
It should be: Well, OK, next you can head over to the pickup page to pick out a premade apple or get an idea from other's apples.
Why: It's OK, O.K., or okay, but not ok. I'm not sure how to rephrase that, but the beginning does not work.
-1 point

The entire requesting paragraph has errors and I literally don't know where to begin. It would be easier to just rewrite it:
Now that you have an idea for your candy apple and you've read the rules, please check if requests are open. If they are, please fill out the form so I can begin your lovely apple. If requests are closed, please come back soon. If you have any questions, please let me know!
-3 points

You wrote: I am sorry for the weird look but I can seem to get links to attach to images right now but I am having TNT check that out for me but for now I think this should work.
It should be: I am sorry for the weird look, but I cannot seem to get links to attach to images right now. I am having TNT check that out for me, but I think this should work for now.
Why: That was too many clauses for one sentence. And I think that you cannot attach links now, while you wrote that you can.
-1 point

Comments

There is no rule number 3.

When you wrote that you're listed at Plethora, you wrote "click here to go to site". That messes up the centering and looks bad, so it should be the same as the other sentences.

Suggestions

You might want to remove the envelope under requesting, because that is just confusing.

It's perfectly acceptable to have link credits rather than button credits to the directories.

Overall

You had typos almost every other sentence! I was amazed at the number of typos, considering how little text you have. I took off an extra two points for the lack of clarity in some of the sentences. I generally only took off points once for each type of error. I hope you like the button! Good luck with your site!


Panda Fun

by Veegal

Score: 91/100

Problems

You wrote: Hello veegal_is_kind.
It should be: Hello, visitor.
Why: The # VISITOR code hasn't been working.
-0 points

You wrote: No pressure to join, take a look around. Whenever you're ready don't be afraid to click 'join' on the homepage.
It should be: No pressure to join; take a look around. Whenever you're ready, don't be afraid to click 'join' on the homepage.
Why: They weren't complete sentences.
-1 point

You wrote: It had no layout, no theme and most importantly no members.
It should be: It had no layout, no theme and most importantly, no members.
Why: You need a comma.
-0.5 points

You wrote: On the 22nd December 2011, ~Panda Fun~ had reopened.
It should be: On the 22nd of December 2011, ~Panda Fun~ reopened.
Why: You need to say the day of the month or month, day, year. And since it only took a day to reopen, you don't need the helping verb.
-1 point

You wrote: Just on the 10th January 2012, we have been established, yet we've realised that we haven't made everything, so we decided to establish it officially on another date.
It should be: Just on the 10th of January 2012, we have been established, yet we've realised that we haven't made everything, so we decided to establish it officially on another date.
Why: See previous comment.
-0 points

You wrote: Now, on the 23rd February 2013, ~Panda Fun~ is being revived so we can achieve our goals an continue to strive what we used to do.
It should be: Now, since the 23rd of February 2013, ~Panda Fun~ is being revived so we can achieve our goals an continue to strive what we used to do.
Why: It should be "since" because the "is being revived" implies an ongoing process that did not occur on one day. And see the previous comment.
-1 point

You wrote: No Drama allowed here.
It should be: No drama allowed here.
Why: Drama is not a proper noun.
-0.5 points

You wrote: I know you have a personal life, but if you just go on and maybe do an activity once a week, then that would mean that you are still serious about this guild
It should have a period at the end of the sentence.
-2 points (for all missed periods)

You wrote: There must be at least 2 weeks interval before you can return the pet, to avoid harassment
It should have a period at the end of the sentence. -0 points

You wrote: Try to be active, please try to go on at least once per 2 weeks.
It should be: Try to be active; please try to go on at least once per 2 weeks.
Why: With a comma, it's a run-on sentence.
-0.5 points

You wrote: What are guilds for, if it wasn't to have fun?
It should be: What are guilds for, if not to have fun?
Why: The first sentence has verbs of two different tenses.
-0.5 points

You wrote: Neomail Veegal
It should have a period at the end of the sentence.
-0 points

You wrote: This layout was created by the wonderful yodiee
It should have a period at the end of the sentence. -0 points

You wrote: Have some activities and a little spotlight, and whatever else you want ^^
It should be: Have some activities and a little spotlight, and whatever else you want.
Why: I don't know why you keep using ^^ instead of periods…
-0 points

You wrote: Have fun activities, crosswords - antyhing you can think of that relates to writing!
It should be: Have fun activities, crosswords - anything you can think of that relates to writing!
Why: Anything was misspelled.
-0.5 points

You wrote on the Portal: In our guild, we want to hear what you; the most important people, say.
It should be: In our guild, we want to hear what you, the most important people, say.
Why: It should be all one sentence.
-1 point

You wrote on the Guild Till page: This page is about how much money and funs we have right now.
It should be: This page is about how much money and funds we have right now.
Why:
-0.5 points

You wrote on the Guild Home: I will accept 1 or 2 spots with just applications, you don't need to be a teacher/parent.
It should be: I will accept 1 or 2 spots with just applications; you don't need to be a teacher/parent.
Why: It was a run-on sentence.
-1 points because it was on the homepage, the most important place.



Comments

You wrote: If you want to be respected, then treat others the way that you want to be treated.
That implies that you only want to treat others the way they want to be treated if they want to be respected. I think you want them to respect each other no matter what they want.

You wrote: Any suggestions are HIGHLY RECOMMENDED. More information below.
I think you meant highly appreciated.

Suggestions

Go through and use spell-check on all the pages. Then read through to check for grammar.

Overall

I only took off for each problem once. You really should read through everything yourself and also double-check all new pages. There were a lot of typos and grammar problems.


A Button Collection

by Turnip

Problems

You wrote under Important Notes on the home page: This is probably due to the large amount of graphics and other animated images.
It should be: This is probably due to the large number of graphics and other animated images.
Why: If something can theoretically be counted, you use number. If it can't be counted, you use amount.

You wrote in the same section: For some reasons, sometimes words show up as "disallowed". This often happens with these words: screen, -blocked-
I don't know what it should be, but it got blocked.

You wrote on the March 20th update: onesurvey answer (button requesters)
It should be: one survey answer (button requesters)
I think that is self-explanatory.

You wrote in chapter 1: This term relates to animation and it's what I describe the amount of time between each animation loop before it repeats again.
It should be: This term relates to animation and it's how I describe the amount of time between each animation loop before it repeats again.
or
This term relates to animation and it's what I describe as the amount of time between each animation loop before it repeats again.
Why: The phrase "the amount of time…" was not really attached to the first part of the sentence in any way that I saw.

You wrote: I.e. "normal text" where no animation occurs
It should be: i.e.normal text" where no animation occurs
Why: You don't need to capitalize "i.e.".

You wrote in chapter 2: ABC Extra: Hover over the images for examples of where to crop to.
the pteri's face
the snow bruce or the candychan
either of the two chias
It should be: the Pteri's face
the snow Bruce or the Candychan
either of the two Chias
Why: Neopets species names are capitalized.

You wrote: Here are some examples of buttons that uses textures or a generic background as the base:
It should be: Here are some examples of buttons that use textures or a generic background as the base:
Why: Since the subject (examples) is plural, the verb must also be plural.

You wrote: The first two uses a texture or pattern, while the third and fourth example uses a Neopet background (like those found at Charly's SWF Collection). It should be: The first two use a texture or pattern, while the third and fourth example use a Neopet background (like those found at Charly's SWF Collection).
Why: Subject-verb agreement; see my previous explanation.

You wrote: (I.e. don't press Ctrl + X)
It should be: (i.e. don't press Ctrl + X)
Why: I.e. doesn't need to be capitalized.

You wrote: I'm going to rotate my grarrl image so that it's face the opposite direction.
It should be: I'm going to rotate my grarrl image so that it faces the opposite direction.
or
I'm going to rotate my grarrl image so that it's facing the opposite direction. Why: The verb had an unnecessary helping verb.

You wrote: And another image example:
It should be: Here's another image example:
Why: You don't really have to change this, but I made it a complete sentence.

You wrote in chapter 3: Areas where this problem often occurs is when button makers crop for the entire body, rather than the face only.
It should be: This problem often occurs when button makers crop for the entire body, rather than the face only.
Why: I'm not sure why you have to do this, but the sentence seemed off before.

You wrote: Another common issue is when button makers crop for the entire scenery rather than focus on one aspect of it.
It should be: Another common issue is when button makers crop for the entire scene rather than focus on one aspect of it.
Why: I think you meant scene. If you meant scenery, then you were right at first.

You wrote: In the second, I opened up an empty 88 by 31 px screen, and pasted that same texture in the -blocked-

You wrote: I want the scorchio's face to be the focal image so this is how I cropped mine:
It should be: I want the Scorchio's face to be the focal image so this is how I cropped mine:
Why: Neopets' names should be capitalized.

You wrote: I.e. I'll have about three or four screens with the same image
It should be: i.e. I'll have about three or four screens with the same image
You might want to go through using Control-F to find all of the times that this happened, as I'm sure there's more.

You wrote in chapter 4: The scan lines are still to harsh.
It should be: The scan lines are still too harsh.
Why: You used the wrong "to".

You wrote in chapter 6: Look for fonts like Impact, Century Gothic, Times new Roman, and Georgia.
It should be: Look for fonts like Impact, Century Gothic, Times New Roman, and Georgia.
Why: Names should be capitalized.

You wrote in chapter 7: The rest of the settings work generally well…
It should be: The rest of the settings generally work well…
Why: If that is indeed what you mean, that phrasing is clearer.

You wrote under General Tips: Some very slight overlapping is ok.
It should be: Some very slight overlapping is OK.
Why: OK was originally an abbreviation, so it must be "OK", "O.K.", or "okay".

You wrote: In the button above, the face is the focal point, so putting the text over the body area or the side of the head is completely fine.
You're talking about two buttons, so I think everything should be plural. If not, then you need a sentence explaining each button.

You wrote: The dark blue colour for the border and the text are both taken directly from the button base.
It should be: The dark blue colours for the border and the text are both taken directly from the button base.
or The dark blue colour for the border and the text is taken directly from the button base. Why: If you used different colours, then it should be plural. If you used the same colour, the verb needs to agree with that.

You did: On the Other Guides page, the link back to the resources page at the bottom goes to #moreresources.
You should have: It should link to #resources.

Under Where to look for images, the link to Dr. Sloth's Image Emporium does not work. You might have to link to the Neopets list of fansites.

You wrote under Creating your own scan lines: Alternatively, you can just hold "Ctrl" and press -disallowed_word- until your screen is large enough to work with.
It should be: I don't know: not _disallowed_word_

You wrote: It's strange to think of creating scan lines are creative, but it definitely can be!
It should be: It's strange to think of creating scan lines as creative, but it definitely can be!
Why: You don't need two verbs without a conjunction.

You wrote under Quick Photoshop 7 tutorial: The higher up a layer is in the list, the more it'll "show.
It should be: The higher up a layer is in the list, the more it'll show.
Why: The quotation marks need to be closed.

You wrote: Layers screen The Layers screen is extremely important so your workstation should include this.
It should be: Layers screen: The Layers screen is extremely important, so your workstation should include this.
Why: It should not just run on with words and no punctuation.

You wrote: Where you organize your layer in the list is very important as well.
It should be: Where you organize your layers in the list is very important as well. Why: You need more than one layer to organize them.

You wrote: For example, Layer 2 is a bokeh layer set to screen.
I'm not sure what you meant by screen.

Comments

None.

Suggestions

None.

Overall

I kept getting distracted trying to learn to make buttons, but hopefully I caught most of the problems. There weren't very many and everything still made perfect sense.


Impressions

by Anh

Score: 97/100

Problems

You wrote under Bundles: Impressions works similar to review sites in requests, except instead of rubrics, we have bundles!
It should be: Impressions works similarly to review sites in the requesting style, excepting that instead of rubrics, we have bundles!
Why: If you mean that the sites work in a similar manner, it should be similarly. You could also say that Impressions is similar
Well, I'm not sure if you even need to change that, but I think that it is better the second way. When I tried to research it, it seems to be a fine line.
-1 point

You wrote under Extras-The Webmistress: I am Vietnamese. I can speak it semi-fluently. I can barely write at all.
It should be: I am Vietnamese. I can speak it semi-fluently. I can barely writeit at all.
Why: You implied that you can't write the first time.
-0.5 points

You wrote under your favorite books: The Mortal Instruments series by Cassandra Clare, The Harry Potter series by J. K. Rowling
It should be: The Mortal Instruments series by Cassandra Clare, the Harry Potter series by J. K. Rowling
Why: The word "series" isn't part of the title.
-0.5 points

Under Extras--Form Guide and Explanation--Sub-Navigation: The first example link in that paragraph goes to a deleted or moved page.

You wrote under Extras-Acknowledgements: Turnip, owner of The lunch Box, Always Connected, and many others:
It should be: Turnip, owner of The Lunch Box, Always Connected, and many others:
Why: "Lunch" should be capitalized.
-0.5 points

Also under Acknowledgements: The site Flux has closed.

Comments

None.

Suggestions

Under affiliates, you write "Click the arrows to view all affiliates." Actually, though, you have to figure out which arrow to pick. I would suggest changing that to make where to click clearer.

Overall

There were a few other sentences that were a little awkwardly phrased, but for the most part, Impressions had few typos. Great job!


Midnight

by Kiko

Score: 96/100

Problems

You wrote on the Home page: Midnight currently has listed 142 sites and 5 Neopian Times articles, listed, and is growing rapidly every day!
It should be: Midnight currently has 142 sites and 5 Neopian Times articles listed and is growing rapidly every day!
Why: You put the verb both before and after the number of sites.
-1

You put on the Get Listed page: You put the form on the page as well as in the neomail. And in the neomail, there's a problem with invalid characters.
It should be: One or the other. And the form should open correctly.
Why: People will fill out the form on the page and then have to do it again in the neomail.
-.5 point

You wrote on the Get Listed page: Under Site Ads, your Send in Your News button links to The Lunch Box.
It should be: That should link to your neomail.
Why: It's confusing if you write "Send in your form!" but it links to another site.
-1 point

You wrote on the Get Listed page under the symbol key: recomended
It should be: recommended
Why: It was misspelled.
-1 point

You wrote on the Extras page: This months goals for Midnight.
It should be: These are this month's goals for Midnight.
Why: Months should be possessive. I also suggest making it a complete sentence and putting content there.
-.5 point

Comments

Under the Requests section, the left scrollbar only does the left column, but the right scrollbar does the whole page.

Suggestions

On the Home page, for the neomail, you can link straight to a neomail by using the following, if you want. You can delete any parts you don't want.

Overall

Midnight is a easy-to-use link directory. You have many typos considering how little text is on the page, however.


Clockwork Directory

by Annie

Score: 100/100

Problems

None!

Comments

Under Credit, you wrote, "This is Fàbregas's credit." I'm not really sure what you mean.

Suggestions

For your Brother site, you might want to link that whole banner, because that's where I first tried to click, and then I realized that you have to click the buttons on the side.

Overall

Well, you don't have much text, but what you do have is perfect! I didn't see any typos at all.


Solaris

by Nina

Score: 95/100
Problems/Comments In the second paragraph of the Welcome, it should be "…a problem with one of my links…"

In the third guideline under Banners, I think it should be "small" rather than "smaller", because you're not comparing it to anything and already saying "relatively".

Under Pick-up, there should be a comma after "currently".

Under Tutorials, in the last sentence, you might want to say something like, "I'm here to make it easier to use Photoshop!" because it sounds like you're making it easier to translate the tutorials.

Under How to Edit an Image, it says, "What you do is you look at the bottom-ish right side of your Photoshop -blocked-" I don't know what was blocked, but that should be fixed.

On the same page, it says: "I'm going to be adding a curve layer." Just after that, "ok" should be "OK". It you read about the history of the word "OK", it was originally an abbreviation or something, so unless Photoshop actually says "ok", it should be changed.

At the end of that page, the link to Details doesn't work. Overall Overall, Solaris didn't have many typos, especially considering how much text the tutorial had. Personally, I liked the tutorial, because I only have Photoshop and can't figure out how to use it. Great job so far! I hope you do the other tutorials soon, and you can then request a Section review if you like.


La Casa

by Jenny

Score: 89/100

Problems

On the Home page, in the About section, Spanish should be capitalized.

On the Requests page, under "Coming Soon", Cindee should be capitalized. Just under that, it should be (correction bolded)Though these reviews are not available yet as a separate review, they can currently be requested as Des, a custom review." (Two misspellings.)

Under the Katch (Improvement Only) review description, the third sentence is not capitalized.

Under the Check-up description and the rules, you sometimes said it could be requested one month later and sometimes you said two weeks.

Under the Lafyia review description, under the Intro in the rubric, you should fix the sentence, "Does your intro, the first thing the viewer reads, well presented and informational?". It should be "Is your intro, the first thing the viewer reads, well presented and informational?" or the rest of the sentence would need to be changed to work with the "does".

Just past that, in Links Check, the "Check" is not capitalized in the title.

Under the Ani review description, the Links Check title is again not capitalized.

Just past that, under the Sections part of the rubric, you wrote, "Is your content well organized and effectively convey important information?" That does not make sense. I think "Is your content well organized and does it effectively convey important information?" or something similar would be better.

And just past that, in the "Grammer, punctuation, professionalism" title, you misspelled "grammar". You did spell it correctly the the paragraph, though. In the same section, it says, "When reading content, do you use chatspeak, smilies, improper grammar?" It should be "When reading content, do you use chatspeak, smilies, or improper grammar?" (The bold is just to make it easier to see the correction.)

On the Sitely page, you should capitalize credits as a section title.

Comments

On the Sitely page, you put a question mark after link back. You might have intended to do that; I'm just mentioning it.

Overall

OK. You had a lot of typos. And some of your sentences didn't make sense. Overall, La Casa is a pretty nice site. But before you open, make sure you get some link back buttons. And I took off more points because you're a review site offering proofreading, so you should have good grammar and spelling yourself. I hope to request a review from you once you open. Thanks for already linking back to me!


Soar

by welovepogo

Score: 96/100

Problems

When using Safari, I could click on the rubrics but I couldn't scroll to see the rest of it. I had to highlight and drag. In Google Chrome, it worked fine. You might want to include a "Best Viewed In" or "Does Not Work In" sign.

Requests is closed, although two rubrics are still available, and Blown Review says always available. Does that mean that they're all just closed?

Under the Pickup navigation, all of them (including Pickup Home) link to below the Pickup heading. That section was confusing, because it's supposed to be results, but some of them don't link anywhere and others just have the rubric.

Comments

As you probably know, not all of the rubrics are completed, leaving me wondering what exactly they were.

The bottom in-site links all work properly in both the browsers I used.

Overall

Um… I didn't really have much to say because it was just so awesome that it didn't have any typos! I know I didn't see any problems. I took off points for the confusing parts. Great job! And thank you for already linking back.


A Melody

by alialamb

Score: 91/100

Problems

Home page: "Now don't be shy, if you have any questions, feel free to neomail my boss, Alia (alialamb)!" I think you should make the first comma after "shy" a semicolon (;).

Under the Updates, it says: "Jan. 31th, 2013". It's "31st".

Also under the updates: "Added glitter and banner request form seperates" It's spelled "separates" and I don't quite know what you mean.

Under Request, one of the rules is "If requests are closed, then don't request.. If you read the rules, put Moderato under the *Tempo* section in your request" First, an ellipsis had 3 dots. (…, not ..) Second, Tempo should probably have quotation marks (" "), not asterisks.

In the next rule, it says, "…please provide the image on a seperate petpage." Again, it should be "separate".

In the next rule, it reads, "If you don't like your graphic, explain to me with exact words on what the problem is, don't just NOT use it." I would recommend making the last phrase a separate sentence or dividing it with a semicolon, not a comma. And anyway, you should delete the word "on". And also, you can't use double negatives. Perhaps "…don't just ignore it" would be better in place of "don't just NOT use it", or something similar. Comments On the waiting list, one person has "userlookup" next to his username. I don't know if that's something personal or what, because there's no request form for it or anything.

in the Pickups section, the top sentence about banners being moved to the portfolio isn't centered at all if it's supposed to be.

The SOTM thing is still on the bottom, but there's nothing there. I don't know if you've just abandoned it for Trifle, but you should either have content there or delete it.

The only thing under the Extras part is the Portfolio, so unless you're going to put more there, you might as well just link straight to the portfolio.

At the bottom of the Portfolio, there's an old waiting list or something. I don't really know the purpose, but, if you're unaware, it's there.

Overall

A Melody is a nice, well-organized site. It had quite a few typos or errors, but only one really interfered with its making sense. Good luck!


Trifle

by alialamb


2/1/13

Score: 94/100

Problems

Top of the main page- It says "welcome alialamb" to me too! I think you wanted # VISITOR without that space. Main page- "*Angels voices singing Hallelujah erupts in your mind*" should be "*Angels'…

Under Categories, "Each category will all be based on different themes and skill/abilities every month" should be "Each category will be based on a different theme and skill/ability every month." Singularize theme and ability, delete all, and add a period.

Under the Enter section, at the top of the section, where it says "Well so be it! Lets get started with a couple rules though.." An ellipsis (…) contains 3 dots. Also under the Enter section, "Have fun! Don't take this whole competition stuff to seriously." That should use "too", not "to".

Also under Enter, you might want to specify which ones are open to be entered instead of just "Open". I don't know if you'd have to get custom images or what, but if some were open and some were full, you'd want to specify.

Under the Food Critiques section: "If you find any stolen info. on any of the applicants, it is your duty to tell me, as a critique!" That first period should be a comma.

Comments:
Under Scene of the Trifle, what are the picture and the link? I can't figure out their purposes…

Under Extras, if the awards are the only thing there, it's probably not worth linking there. Just an idea.

Here's a visual complaint that's also not a typo. On the whole site, the text is a bit cramped into the box. At the same time, there's about an inch of blank space between that and the updates, because the left column is longer. I would suggest that you extent the main box to the same size as the left one.

Overall

In all, I liked your site. It didn't have very many typos, and none interfered with understanding the meaning. Great job! Feel free to take your award. (Smaller buttons probably coming soon) Good luck with the site!


Focus

by chosmos


1/13/13

Score: 86/100

Problems/Comments

On your main page, in the first sentence, it should be spelled "officially", not "officialy".

Second sentence: It sounds like you've been studying web design for 15 years. On the other hand, if you mean to say you're 15 years old, you should include the word "old".

On the fourth sentence in that paragraph, you should say, "It's also to interact…", so the first part of the sentence has a subject.

In that paragraph, you might want to talk in the first person "I" if you're talking about yourself.

I don't really understand the last sentence of Rule #4. If you explain that, I can help you more.

In rule #5, you should use a semicolon (;), not a comma.

Under Request, you might want to use, an envelope pixel in addition to the "here" link, just to make it easier to find. If you want.

Also under Request, it says, "Below, you'll see the name of the people that…" It should be "names", not "name".

As well, the "done"s and "open"s are not quite lined up with the usernames.

In the same place, you might want to make it more clear if requests are open or closed.

Again, just to be more clear, you might want to have a heading for the "Sitely" section.

The Douceur banner on your Sitely part is sideways. I don't know if it's supposed to be or not.

Next to the banner, there, "You should give it a chance." would sound more natural than "You should give a chance for it.

Overall:

There were a lot of typos and small errors, and in some places, it was confusing what you meant. In general, the site is organized and has good spelling and grammar. Good luck with the site! Your buttons are awesome.


Sitely

Link back!

Buttons are linked back to the maker. Hover for the site name.






Affiliates!

Requests are open! / /

Other!

Awards!



Listers!

If they list open/closed requests, it will say so when you hover.

Credits!


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